Razor Sharp Rants

razorleaf @ 2009-12-24T12:21:00

2009-12-24T11:21:43Z

Farla, I blame you for having to read this. OMG.

Even so, I love your review month. It's hilarious.

razorleaf @ 2009-12-16T06:09:00

2009-12-16T05:09:26Z

Aron

Hmm? And you are? No, wait, let me take a wild guess. You're one of Farla's devoted lackeys, blindly trotting at her heels like a trained poodle and obeying her whims and commands like the loyal pet you are, even to the point that you would throw yourself on fire to evoke a skip and a clap from her.

As a (somewhat) human being, you are, like all of us, entitled to your own opinion on my self-regard, but simply stating that won't change the fact that I am right. Of course, you know that, otherwise you would have at least mounted some kind of decent reply to something that is, as can be now clearly seen, above your limited intelligence.

The idiots are always the first to point and laugh when they find superiority threatening. Witch hunts are usually what come next.

Source.

Aaaaand I'm right back to being the lackey. Damnit!

razorleaf @ 2009-12-14T15:42:00

2009-12-14T14:42:08Z

Flisters, I need your help. I've been hit by a plotbunny for pokémon fic - which is a rarity in itself - and I'm curious to see if people think it would work. With the amount of people my reviews have apparently pissed off, I need as few mistakes in it as possible, so before I start writing I want your opinion on the plot.

It's still being fiddled with, but this is the basic idea. It includes legendaries, which is something I don't generally work with, and ghosts. *snicker*

Hannah Wilson, a twenty year old guide from Snowpoint City, escorts a scientist from Eterna City – he’d been working on the statue there – to her home town so he can investigate the temple there. He claims to have discovered something that might change everything.

The journey is a perilous one and they are faced with a constant case of bad luck; rubble falls down and obstructs their way, a pokémon suddenly falls ill, their tent almost flies away during a blizzard, and the normally calm spirit of a haunted house suddenly decides to confront the scientist, Simon, about things that make no sense.

However, they eventually make it and she leaves him at the temple. Several days go by, when suddenly the entire town shakes and the temple literally breaks in two, revealing an underground chamber with a regigigas statue in it. Simon has something to do with it, but no one knows what. People also reportedly see ‘flashes of white’ escape the rubble.

Simon, incredibly shaken, implores Hannah to return him to Eterna City immediately. It’s there that he asks her to accompany him to find Regirock, Registeel, and Regice, as he is in need of someone who could live out in the wild and guide him around. Needing the money, she accepts, even though she knows nothing about the routes he wants to travel.

She eventually finds out Simon’s aim is to awaken Regigigas and that he now needs the three other Regis to do so, where he hopes to catch him.

During the course of their travels – which take them to Hoenn - Hannah forms a friendship with Simon, but also slowly realizes that his motives might not be what he says they are, as he owns an item that looks rather dangerous, and he seems to be cursed. Even worse, wherever they go she is faced with frantic ghosts trying to communicate with her.

razorleaf @ 2009-12-13T16:00:00

2009-12-13T15:00:37Z

DaddyLongArms20:

As a none professional writer, and as a human being who can be self-conciece at times, about my worth to the world. I ask and nicely demand that you review my stories with positive and kind; opinions/suggestions/ideas/questions/remarks/statements/and correctionions.

If you can not do so in a Positive and Kind way then I request that you keep those negative opinions/suggestions/ideas/questions/remarks/statements/and corrections to yourself. If you feel you must say them by all means go to the bathroom and yell them into the toliet... because i don't want/desire/need/or even derve to be treated like a piece of garbage, because like you I am a human being, not a piece of trash.

I also ask that any and all who try to correct my grammer in a rude and unnessary way, go hit yourself with a bat because that is just as stupid as trying to correct small errors on grammer... no human is perfect... and there is no Exact right form of grammer and speech... as long as the idea of what the writer or speaker is trying to get the reader or listener to understand is understood then the story or speech is fine the way it is... any who disagree with that really need to look and listen to the world around us. Because there are several ideas of what CORRECT grammer is and they can't all be right... end of story... Period!

Source.

There are no words...

No exact right form of grammar and speech? (I'm assuming she meant 'punctuating speech' here.) Several ideas of what correct grammar is?

WTF? This person really is delusional.

razorleaf @ 2009-12-11T23:24:00

2009-12-11T22:24:24Z

I wrote some reviews and just now received a reply. I was met with all caps and assumed they weren't happy. Reading it, I was pleasantly surprised.

YEAH,YOU'RE RIGHT. I DID MAKE MISTAKES. ONE MISTAKE, (YOUR INSTEAD OF YOU'RE)
WAS AN ACCIDENT. SOMETIMES WHEN I TYPE, I MAY REPEAT A WORD OR FORGET HOW TO
SPELL A SIMPLE WORD. I DO KNOW ABOUT "YOU'RE" THING. I GUESS I WAS
SOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO EXCITED.
BUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUT, THANKS FOR REVIEWING! I BET YOUR STORIES ARE
AWESOME. I'LL READ THEM SOMETIMES. ^-^

THAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAANKS!

It's still shouting, but...positive? It's the weirdest thing ever to me. I'm so not used to this. O_O

Regarding the discussion going on in Farla's forum:

How the hell does that person manage to switch focus whenever they're met with something they have no reply to, then come back to it later on and still manages to think they have an intelligent stand-point? (Sentence is loooong.)

EDIT: Also, replying to DaddyLongArms20 makes me feel dumb. *bashes head in* And that name reminds me of bad, incestuous things that make me feel dirty just thinking about it.

razorleaf @ 2009-12-08T13:17:00

2009-12-08T12:17:26Z

SparkyStarZ-13:

You are just as bad as Farla, Lalaith86 (I posted a name this time, happy?)

You're just making excuses. By the way, I didn't say that what Farla was suggesting was wrong (about googling a topic) I just stated that calling someone stupid is not the way to handle it. You don't have the right.

Skipping all of you bad (and repetitive) excuses; you say that young writers still have to grow with their work, and you say that if people don't have think enough skin to handle cyber-bulling, then they shouldn't post their stories? No, it's not them that should stop posting, it's Farla that should stop being so rude.

It's cocky people like you (NOT in general) that need to wake up and relise that what your saying isn't helping. Your making a big deal out of this. All I asked was that Farla change her words.

Besides, I don't give a damn what you think; Farla is being disrespectful and he/she knows it.

Cyber-bulling? Oh, man, that's an awesome visual. Also, Farla is apparently a bitch. Who knew?!

Source.

razorleaf @ 2009-11-23T18:52:00

2009-11-23T17:52:45Z

Just because I know it pleases Yami so:

Yami, in response to a comment of mine in her journal:

You're still an asshole with nothing better to do; like everyone else you seem to associate yourself with.

You and your ilk complain I am immature, yet I don't go around stalking you or anyone else on Serebii that has annoyed, offended or irked me.

And while I do rant at friends sometimes about how stupid, belittling or down right creepy this is, as you aren't the first idiot to do this and now I realize, you're not going to be the last bandwagon idiot for 'lets group together like a cult and hate Yami'.

So all I can really do I guess is accept the fact that there are such anal retarded idiots that spew lulz in such a way as they come off as no better than the people they try and act higher then.

And you still admit you basically made an LJ just to dramawhore and dramamonger with others, over an internet forum- and over one person.

I see a real bright future for you. Really.

She then banned me from replying. Awww, Yami, that's no fair. I give you the option to comment in mine, after all. *makes a sadface*

I aim to make Yami feel special, though, so I just had to make a ~~stalkery~~ post about it. *nodnod*

razorleaf @ 2009-11-17T18:27:00

2009-11-17T17:27:16Z

Diddy:

I also thought it was hilarious to make my Psychology teacher think I need "professional help", it was so easy.

I had her pointlessly worrying about me.

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All in time Grasshopper.

I find it easiest to watch people, learn what they are. Like this one girl in college. She was proud of herself, in the past, she was a wreck, bulemia, anorexia, drank etc. but now she was a lot better, healthy. Pride is all well and good, but I thought she was one peg too high, she made friends with people less attractive and socially apt than her, which basically made her the most socially accepted person in that group at any one time. It was a few days before the end of college and we were talking in a group (this was about the only time I'd done so properly with her) to cut things short I tactfully moved the conversation to where I wanted it then I began telling people how good I was at picking out self-held flaws. I focused on her, and really got to her, she left and the guys in the group told me that no one has been able to do that before, gaining me muchos kudos.

I smiled my cheshire cat smile and graciously bowed out.

Shame really, she was a nice girl.

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There was another one like that. Deluded herself into thinking that she was attractive because the guys she hung around had only seen women through computer monitor glass or thick foliage.

Not worth the bother though.

College was awesome for people watching. Where I stayed on breaks, it was called the "Mezzanine" or mez for short. Mainly because the people that hung around there were social outcasts or idiots who just were idiotic and annoying.

Source.

I...have no words. I always thought Diddy was an idiot, but this kind of stuff just... Gah, I don't even know what to say. Somehow he thinks being an ass makes him cool? I know this is a view widely held on the internet - the harder you troll, the more people will respect you, or something - but what he's describing here is just so moronic.

Yes, even Serebii occasionally manages to surprise me. *makes a face*

I would blame it on Yami, but even she's not this much of a bitch. I think. : P

razorleaf @ 2009-10-30T23:04:00

2009-10-30T22:12:02Z

This Llama is amazed. One day back and Yami already manages to confuse me ~~and piss me off~~. It's quite impressive.

To be honest this is rushed, flat and there's no editing from the first posting, to this. You have grammar errors, mostly with tenses, past/present or using completed words or doing more than what would be a sterotypical non native speaker, speaking/narrating the whole book.

Please someone explain to me what she's trying to say here? Because as a 'non-native speaker', I'm really curious. Though what kind of stereotypical non-native speakers there are, I don't know. The idiotic, bumbling one with the tense problems? Oh, I don't know.

btw hypocritical bans from hypocritical people, is still hypocritical.

And her signature still makes me laugh.

razorleaf @ 2009-09-19T03:44:00

2009-09-19T01:49:01Z

Hmmm.

You would think that if someone continues to declare that they 'don't care about you people, OMG!1' they wouldn't then mention said people every opportunity they got and in completely unrelated places. (Even if they hide it so wonderfully by comparing them to animals continuously.)

Or is my logic slipping here?

(PS: Hi, Yami! This peabrain still loves you, I swear!)

razorleaf @ 2009-09-10T22:49:00

2009-09-10T20:52:52Z

Because seeing as Yami is whining about me ranting about her in my personal journal, I just had to make her happy and post about it again. Here, I'll even put it in bold for you!

Yami commented on a post of mine! CHEER!

It was truly splendid.

Here be the link.

For those too lazy to go check it out themselves, I'll just copy and paste under this fancy cut.

Subject: YAMI IS TO LAZY TO LOG IN
I still came for the lulz when one of my friends found this! Lol. Act right? Cause I've just about forgotten all the little drama whores who drama about me and go about me. It's partly why I abandond my old LJ because I realized, I drama whored myself over a forum and people with a crack IQ of -5.

'It's really sad, because I think her tenure at Serebii is important to her.'

Actually have you even seen it when I do mention I was a mod? It's to rub it in the hypocritical faces of those that attack me, yet openly admit that they don't attack mods who act like me aka Chozo huuur. Cause I iz not mod. It's why I would partly like my modship back, so I could tell the dumbfucks to shut the fuck up and be done with it :)

'It's rather fascinating to me how she can say she has 'true friends', when she's willing to drop those friends on a whim should they outwardly disagree with her. I don't understand how her friends deal with that, it can't be a fun relationship to have.'

I take it you mean the Furry by the name of Psychic? She was never my friend- she basically used me to get more into power. You don't pull an Et To Brutus on someone and still think you can be friends.

And the real sad thing is? You and all your little drama llama whore best friend buds, going on and on about me, when I don't give a flying fuck what you do now or what you try and do now.

:) have fun ranting about some person on them thar intarnetz with your other SPPFail friends.

And good god aren't we a grammar nazi too XD

So yeah have fun proving you all have nothing better to do than rant about mean ol former mod Yami!!!

Who needs movies when you have Yami? ^^

razorleaf @ 2009-08-24T12:52:00

2009-08-24T10:56:28Z

Oh, punctuation, you wound my heart.

Zephyr Flare:

For speech what you should be doing is this:

"Hello there, sir! I am George!" the taller man shouted with glee as he fell into a bow and thrusted hand ready for a shake.
"Greetings then, Mr. George! I am Bob myself, how do you do?" Exclaims the shorter of the pair, swiftly taking the hand and shaking in greeting.

Source.

If even a fanfiction mod can't get it right...

Also, I find it suspicious that she used an exclamation point and question mark, because it means she got out of having to use that darned comma. (Which would have been a much better explanation, too. Though, granted, I think she was going for how to properly stack dialogue, not punctuate, but it still FAILs. (See what I did there??)

razorleaf @ 2009-08-19T13:49:00

2009-08-19T11:54:47Z

Yami Ryu:

Oh dear. An attempt to burn me? Because I happened to point out you failed to critique in any helpful way no matter how bad? And attempt to claim you can be nice when infact all you did was bash, belittle and harm a newbie spriter more than help.

Alright, whatever floats you're Failboat, Bert.

Source.

Is Yami trying to make me die laughing? Because the irony of her telling someone - especially about sprites, because that's where she gets even nastier than in fanfiction - that they're bashing, belittling and harming a newbie spriter is just...*dies a little inside*

Also, 'you're Failboat'? Yami.

It's so nice of her to try so hard.

Oh, Yami...

2009-08-17T11:19:31Z

Yami Ryu:

So yes if you're gonna say one thing and mean something completely different, I do suggest you get your story straight Niedude, you almost hurt a writer here, not helped :)

Source.

OMG, the irony... So, basically Yami is saying niedude - who did a poor job at phrasing that sentence, granted - hurt a writer by not being helpful. Even though Yami's basic method of reviewing consists of yelling, comparing something to Twilight - which isn't a compliment, of course - and telling people they fail. Because that is so very helpful.\

"Hey, go read this jumbled thread of information and make sure you don't FAIL/suck/write like Stephanie Meyer/or react to me in any way other than praise, because that would mean you don't want to improve. Ta!"

Methinks Yami doesn't have the right to judge other people on how helpful they are.

~

Let's not even mention her 'row' with Dragonfree. (Though it's a decidedly one-sided row, because Yami seems to hate her guts while Dragonfree doesn't seem to care either way.)

Yami Ryu:

You and Psychic Reviewing are tbh events of the century!!! since it seems you both do it so rarely.

Yes, because Sandra reviews every other day. In fact, I'd say their reviews outclass Sandra's by a mile. Which isn't to say Sandra has to review like that, because I think expecting mods to review often is stupid, but comparing them in that way is, well, ridiculous.

And yes Dragonfree, you do hate me, or atleast, I hate you. Because to be honest, you backed and supported an attack that was done out of spite, malice, discontent, hatred and just plain petty feelings, on a friend of mine. And you supported people claiming said friend of mine favors me.

She probably did that because Sandra, I don't know, favours you.

And from what I've seen strangely it feels like, people have been either causing Sandra to ditch me as her friend, or cause me to ditch her.

So, basically, Sandra and Yami's relationship is falling apart? O_O

Source.

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I don't actually hate Yami. I find her annoying, childish and almost impossible to deal with in a mature manner, but I do wish she'd grow up already. *sigh*

Punctuating Speech.

2009-08-06T12:01:10Z

I wrote a short guide on punctuating dialogue a while ago and was asked about it again recently. Since there are more accomplished writers than me on my flist, I would love some comments and suggestions on how to improve. I'm still a bit unsure about certain rules, so clarification on things I did wrong in this guide would be awesome.

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(Topics include punctuating and stacking dialogue properly.)

If there's ever something that gets neglected or done wrong, then it's punctuation. All those commas, periods/full-stops and semi-colons confuse people to no end. It's not surprising, especially for non-native speakers, as it's not something that is widely taught. Most people know how to end a sentence and maybe to use commas, but apart from that not a lot gets taught in schools.

In fanfiction, the one thing that I see done wrong most is the punctuation of speech. Speech is something that almost every story is going to include. After all, characters talk. So it's pretty important that people know how to punctuate this.

I figured I'd give my account of the punctuation rules regarding speech. Some of these are debatable, as both forms are used, but I'll try to stick to the most straight-forward ones.

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You use speech when a character wants to relay something, be it through yelling, whispering, shouting, or whatever you had in mind. This means you often have both a spoken sentence and a character. Take this sentence, for instance:

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"Hey," the girl said.

You have the spoken sentence and you have the character. 'Hey' is the spoken sentence and 'the girl said' the character.

This can vary wildly and so can the position of the character in relation to what is said. It could be after the spoke sentence, like in the example, before it, or even separating two segments of the same spoken sentence.

Now, have another look at the sentence I just used as an example.

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"Hey," the girl said.

You always open and close spoken sentences with speech marks. ("") The start of a new sentence always gets a capital. Those are pretty standard things. What is not so standard, and something that may confuse you, is the comma after 'Hey'.

That comma is very important in punctuating speech. All spoken sentences that include what I call a 'speech verb', get a comma.

'Said' is such a speech verb. These are verbs that are used to utter a spoken sentence. She is 'saying' that sentence, so the two parts 'Hey' and 'she said' are directly related. Which means you get a comma.

(Other speech verbs include but aren't limited to: asked, wondered, yelled, inquired, whispered, uttered, stuttered, barked, inquired, etc.)

This is the right way of punctuating this sentence:

RIGHT:
Quote:
"Hey," she said.

WRONG:
Quote:
"Hey." she said.

"Hey," She said.

"Hey." She said.

The same thing happens when something is yelled, or asked. Only instead of a comma, you get an exclamation point or a question mark. For example:

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"Hey!" she yelled.

"What's wrong?" she asked.

As you can see, the part after it is still lower-cased.

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Now, what about when you put the character in front of the sentence, as we'd discussed?

The idea is still the same, only in reverse. Instead of putting the comma after the spoken sentence, you put it after the person. After all, those two sentence fragments are directly related.

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She said, "Hey."

It's unlikely that you'd really use a sentence like this. Or, at least, to me it just reads awkward. However, more complex sentences will use this. Like, for instance, one like this:

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The boy looked up at the sky and said, "It's going to rain."

We still start the sentence - and end it - with speech marks, and we still start it with a capital. The comma has changed places and because the sentence has ended, we get a period/full-stop at the very end.

RIGHT.

Quote:
He caressed the cat's fur and said, "She's gorgeous."

WRONG.

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He caressed the cat's fur and said. "She's gorgeous."

He caressed the cat's fur and said, "she's gorgeous."
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So far so good. Now the tricky part. What happens when the speaker - the character who is saying the sentence - is in the middle of the spoken words? This is something that opinions differ on a lot and it depends totally on the situation. Let's take a clear-cut example to begin with.

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"I'm tired," he explained. "Yesterday I spent most of my time studying."

I bolded the most important parts, as it's, well, important that you have a good look at these.

The first part of the sentence 'I'm tired' is punctuated like you've been taught. A comma is necessary, because it includes a speech verb. (Explained.)

But then what happens when the sentence continues after the character has been mentioned? That depends on what kind of sentence it is. This one is cut into two pieces. 'I'm tired' and 'Yesterday I spent most of my time studying'. These two pieces can function as separate sentences. They are not two parts of a whole. This means they're not directly linked to each other, so you put a period/full-stop after the character and start the second sentence - in this case 'Yesterday...etc.' - with a capital.

Other examples of this include:

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"I don't know," he admitted. "What do you think should be done?"

"I haven't a clue," he said. "Maybe Jacob knows."

Then we have those annoying sentences that require a comma. These sentences are ones that can't stand on their own. Part of what they need to be a complete sentence has been put in front of the character, while the rest is after it. Take this one, for example:

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"Chris," his mother began, "you need to sit down."

Now, what his mother is saying is this: "Chris, you need to sit down."

(There so happens to be direct address, so it makes adding the comma even easier.)

That is one sentence, not two. So you don't use a period/full-stop, you use a comma and make the second spoken segment lowercased. After all, the sentence doesn't end after 'Chris', it's still going on.

RIGHT:

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"That," she snarled, "was a really bad move."

WRONG:

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"That." she snarled, "was a really bad move."

"That," She snarled, "was a really bad move."

"That," she snarled. "was a really bad move."

"That," she snarled, "Was a really bad move."

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Those are the most common instances of sentences that involve speech verbs. If it doesn't, then it's a lot easier to punctuate.

Sentences that don't have speech verbs aren't directly related to the spoken sentences, so they're always unrelated and don't require to be connected. The spoken words are always before, during or after something that doesn't fit with it. Take this sentence:

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"Hey!" She waved.

This girl isn't 'waving a sentence', she's yelling 'Hey' and then waving, or maybe she's waving while yelling 'Hey'. Either way, the waving and the yelling don't belong together, so it's a new sentence and gets a capital. The same goes for sentences that end in question marks or periods/full-stops.

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"Hey." The girl smiled.

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"What's wrong?" The woman looked concerned.

It's that easy. They're two separate sentences, so you treat them as such.

RIGHT:

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"I don't know." The man shrugged.

WRONG:

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"I don't know," the man shrugged.

"I don't know." the man shrugged.

"I don't know," The man shrugged.

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When the sentence happens in front of the spoken words, then the same thing happens. They're not related, so you get a period/full-stop and a capital letter.

Quote:
The man shrugged. "I don't know."

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If it's in the middle of a sentence, then you once again get a period/full-stop and a capital.

Quote:
"I don't know." The man shrugged. "I should keep an eye on him."

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So now you know how to punctuate those lines of speech. That's great! But what happens when there's more than two people speaking and you have to combine their words into a conversation? How could you do that?

The first thing I try to set up is how many people are talking. If there's only two, then you don't have to worry so much about constantly identifying who is saying what. After all, people are unlikely to talk to themselves - and if this is the case, then it's important the writer addresses this, because it's not common - so it's normal to assume the person replying is the second person, not the speaker himself.

Remember, every time a new speaker speaks, you start a new paragraph!

This is very important, because it keeps you from confusing your readers.

Also remember that you don't always have to include who is saying what, especially if there are only two people talking. Take this conversation, for example:

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"What are you doing?" Alex asked.

Adam shrugged. "I'm not sure."

"Waiting for Julia?"

"Probably," Adam admitted.

Alex nodded. "Understandable."

A sigh. "I just don't know what to do."

"Adam," Alex whispered, "it'll happen soon enough."

"Maybe."

Can you tell who said what? Due to the fact that you know every new speaker gets a new paragraph - so every time Adam takes over from Alex, you press enter twice - and there are enough times the speaker is identified, you should be able to tell who is saying what.

(Of course you should add a lot more meat to a conversation. This was just a quick example, lacking the description that a story would need.)

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The last bit I'm going to discuss is what to do when one person is saying so much that you need to divide it into several paragraphs.

If that happens, then you remove the last - closing - speech mark until the very end of what he is saying. So, you start every paragraph with a speech mark - to indicate he is talking - but you don't end it until he is completely done talking.

For instance:

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"Blahblahblah

"Blahblahblahblah

"Blahblahblah."

(Image these three paragraphs are full of text instead of just some nonsensical 'blah'ing. ;))

That's the way to do it!

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Now, if there are any questions, feel free to ask. I'm not a master at punctuation either, but this is something I think is very important so I've tried to get it right. Leave me a comment or PM me and I'd gladly reply to whatever you have to say!

Challenge!

As a challenge for whoever is still reading this... Try writing a short conversation between two of your main character and use as many different ways of writing speech. (So, put the speaker before, in the middle, or after the spoken words. Use both speech and regular verbs. Etc.)

Try to make it clear who is speaking, but don't litter your work with too many 'said (person)' sentences.

Good luck!

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Related Content.

I think this page is a very useful way to remind yourself of the rules.

Opinions?

razorleaf @ 2009-07-26T23:21:00

2009-07-26T21:23:25Z

Why am I on holiday - to Italy, and it was awesome, thanks - just when Yami gets banned? Now I need to read all the emails I missed the last three weeks, deal with all the missed LJ entries, tour Serebii, and laugh myself silly at Yami's misfortune. (Because I'm evil like that.) How am I supposed to deal with all that?!

Damnit, people!

razorleaf @ 2009-05-20T12:26:00

2009-05-20T10:37:31Z

Is it me or has Yami been showing up in drama more the last two weeks? Or maybe I just notice it more. *shrug*

In this thread, a fic by TorterraGuy, Yami said the following:

¬¬

Not to be a jerk? Why not- you obviously failed to read anything told to you, or anything explained. And how was I a ****ing jerk for just pointing out you failed to really describe anything. When infact, Torpoleon lolligagged and did the exact same thing.

So fine. I will be a real jerk- I'll let you simmer in your puddle of mediocrity.

Torpeleon didn't much appreciate being dragged into it, so responded:

Yami Ryu, now your being rude to me. I'm trying in my fic, and that has nothing to do with Torterra Guy's fic! If have nothing nice to say; don't say it at all.

This is where the fun stuff starts. Yami considered that comment a reason to start VMing the guy.

Yami:
Yami Ryu, now your being rude to me. I'm trying in my fic, and that has nothing to do with Torterra Guy's fic! If have nothing nice to say; don't say it at all.

Says the one that called me a ***** and a piece of ****.

Or is it alright for you to be a hypocrit? Whatever- you're not helping anyone anyways and I really don't care if you spechul writorz stay in ur puddle and splash in the mud.

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Torpoleon:
That was my brother that said that. Seriously, stop VMing me!

~
Yami:
BROTHER OR NOT THIS ACCOUNT CALLED ME THAT- and if you DONT want me to vm you, then DON'T try and say omg yami be less mean. Oh yes I was really such a cruel *****.

If you can't man up to the fact YOU called me that or YOU ALLOWED your brother to call me that- then that's NOT my problem either.

But I guess I'll have to be the 'more' 'mature' one and ignore the both of you in a single stroke.

~

Torpoleon:
All I'm saying is to not bring up my skills on my fic in someone else's fic. It isn't like that will help TorterraGuy. I never told you to VM me! That was a way of saying I loaf about my ifc.(or something like that) It's not like everyone is as good as you want them to be in a fic. This isn't your little world where everyone has to be perfect.

~

Yami:
All I'm saying is to not bring up my skills on my fic in someone else's fic

LOL. DID I SAY THAT. NO. I MEANT YOUR REVIEWING SKILLS. AND YOU BASICALLY COPIED WHAT I AND WHAT ANOTHER SAID BUT ONLY SINGLED ME OUT AS BEING 'MEAN'.

But whatever as I said, you're ignored, I could care less if you somehow managed to figure out how to **** a flying donut, you opened the can of worms and I'm gonna close it because I'm just sick, and tired, of you and your brother, real or not.

And as I said I don't care if you stay in your puddle, and drag the gullible down with you- you were offered help. You ignored it.

Torpoleon wasn't happy with what Yami had done, though, and tried to get a mod to step in. Problem is, he went to the wrong one.

Torpoleon:

Hi, can you please talk to Yami Ryu. Here's why. On TorterraGuy's fic I was going to post and one of the things Yami Ryu said was, In fact, Torpoleon lollygaggs and does the same thing. Okay, the fic isn't excelllent, but I'm helping. The thing that really urks me is that the thing she said was about my skills in my fic and that has nothing to do with TorterraGuy's fic and that isn't advice. That is mean and Yami Ryu said she is never mean, she just "giving advice" She replys and I told her to stop VMing me and she thinks that by me saying not to be cruel to me(I didn't Vm her first) that means that I wanted her to VM me. The whole point is, that I don't understand why she has to talk about my skills in a fic in someone ele's fic when that doesn't help the person get better.

Thanks, in advance.

~

Zephyr Flare:

Hm looking back see I had to delete a few posts as it started on an author war that concentrating on the fic (Left to simmer stead of reporting like Act did actually) which somehow doesn't help matters and actually encourages it.

Also obvious it wasn't at you too :/ Well one thing was but I think that's largely been mentioned that since you're helping and the exact same thing you're doing is clearly unintetionally influencing to cause the same issue in a new fic. Now that IS something that effects both rather than a sniper shot. Something like that is very unconscious and does happen. To act as if it doesn't would be rather idiotic. Coulda been phrased better sure but thats some info you can actually use rather than taking insult to absolutely everything.

Speaking as someone who had reviews like this and much much harsher so I just picked out the important bits and utlised them rather than trying to think how to fight back. Truth be told if you see those old fics now they are horrid. Good christ where was my paragrpahing skills. The real offending posts which was a huge swear fit by one member have dutifully been removed cus THAT was way over the line.

- Who the hell put character limits on these things, God.

~

Torpoleon:

Uh, okay.......

Just know, people, that every time you do something wrong in your own fic, people can immediately blame you for other people's mistakes too.

I love Serebii. *dreamy sigh*

razorleaf @ 2009-05-13T16:03:00

2009-05-13T14:07:37Z

Well tbh I don't think you should have to give examples every time on how to improve- mean you can forget or be rushed when you review, but still, throwing them to the advice thread, to some other author works, or even a book or two should be enough of an example in itself.
Source.

Ah, yes. Because throwing a book at someone's head is definitely going to teach them the intricacies of punctuating speech. Must be confusing to see those commas and periods/full-stops used 'randomly'.

Yelling at someone to go read a book or that rubbish thread isn't giving constructive criticism. It is being lazy and unhelpful. That thread should be secondary only, not the only help a writer gets.

EDIT:

That is an extreme example. And somewhat belittling to people who can't swim, or are drowning. There is a difference between the two, you know, and besides if you have to lead them by a hand all the time, showing them exactly what to do how is that going to help. I've started to realize, no it doesn't always and sometimes making them work for it, can be just as good.

Besides I'd be unable to help a drowning person- I'm not that good at swimming myself.

And lighten up- we aren't their teachers. I mean chist, my teacher never gave us examples. Just told us what to do or what was wrong. Tho tbh even is she had, I doubt I would still give examples 100% of the time.

We're not their keepers- they should be able to learn and experience for themselves.

*sigh* Oh, Yami. -_-

Thank you, Jesus!

2009-04-13T10:17:18Z

Wow! Jesus has come to the pokémon world:

A school of Feebas and Magikarp were briskly swimming when a sudden disturbance caused them all to scatter. A figure could be seen traveling quickly over the water causing large waves to form behind him. His name was Zeak and he appeared to be an average human boy, but if you got a closer look you’d see he’s anything but normal. Then again last time anyone checked running on water wasn’t exactly normal.

The guy can actually walk on water. *snerk* Also, the writer responded to my question what Jesus was doing in a pokémon fic by saying:

Anyway I didn't realize I was painting my character in a negative light, and
I definitely didn't intend on writing another Jesus, but when I wrote that I
was intending that to make it sound like he was running so quickly, there
wasn't enough time for the water to suck him under, but I guess I didn't
unveil that right.

Basically, he's a ~~Stu~~ boy who finds out he's the last of an ancient and very special race. He lives with two cyndaquil and two quilava, who he can talk to and calls siblings, and is apparently very special. Heck, he kills a tyranitar with a knife! Badass is he!

Afterwards a wounded typhlosion asks him to take care of her kidlets, forgetting all about her fear and hatred of humans. Because Zeak is different, you know.

Ah, pokémon fandom, I've missed you.

Source: A Lone Guardian.

razorleaf @ 2009-04-10T14:43:00

2009-04-10T12:48:40Z

Quick question to whoever still watches this journal. I've been bored out of my mind and after working on CITM's latest chapter, I've gotten the urge to read some OT-fic. I know, it's crazy, but then I've always preferred them. They remind me of why I fell in love with pokémon to begin with. The pokémon, the training, the battles, the travelling, the characters... *grin*

So, basically, I'm looking for good trainer!fic. No Sues, no Stus, no legendaries, none of that crap, just good, old-fashioned trainer!fic. The longer the better. Other plots alongside are fine, but being a pokémon trainer has to be an important part of it.

I'm sure you guys know what kind of fic I like, but if not, my own story is basically the kind of thing I like.

So, friendlist, hit me with fic!

razorleaf @ 2009-02-20T00:44:00

2009-02-19T23:58:21Z

This is a few days old, but hilarious. Yami's somehow convinced herself that mods should be at her beck and call. If a fic is subpar and she can't be arsed to review it, then abusing the report button is perfectly acceptable and should be used to make a mod review said subpar fic. Regardless if it breaks the rules, or whatnot.

Oh, Yami, you so funny.

Quote.
You kept acting like I was cracking a whip and beating you into reviewing all the bad fics when for once, I wanted to give Sandra a break from dealing with it, and have one of the OTHER fanfic mods do something about ONE thread.

Yes, because Sandra has been doing so much reviewing lately! Poor Sandra. *sadface* I mean, she has reviewed countless threads, you know! Even though all the posts Sandra has made - save one, which was a review, albeit a short one - back to the 25th of December, I couldn't be arsed to look back further, have been either answers to questions, her locking fic, or roleplay posts. Those reviews, they're hiding from us. Sneaky, sneaky posts.

(I'm working with the belief here that yelling 'this and this and this is wrong, read the rules and aspiring authors!'at the top of your longues isn't reviewing. Readers are free to disagree. However, that method of reviewing was used a while back, not the last couple of months.)

I miss Serebii's crazy. I really should try and find some time to review. *nodnod*

razorleaf @ 2009-02-02T21:39:00

2009-02-02T20:43:06Z

So, yeah, I won most helpful reviewer at the Serebii awards. Yay! ^^ Only by one vote, but still... Whoever voted for me, thanks a lot. That award means a lot to me. *grin*

Caught in the Moment only got three votes, but then that was expected. Perhaps I need to put boys with magical swords in it to get more votes next time. *ponders*

Congrats to other winners who might read this and have a nice evening, all. ;)

razorleaf @ 2008-12-30T23:51:00

2008-12-30T22:53:14Z

People asked me what Mightyena26's reply was. Here you go, ladies and gents:

While the answer to the question is really my business, I'll answer it
honestly. I take everything to heart. I've been badly abused (not by my
family) by a lot of people, both online and in person. I'm very cautious. I
don't have time for flames, not even hurtful criticism. I'm not perfect. I'm
not writing to try to be the best. I'm writing for fun. I don't care if my
grammer isn't perfect, nor is my overall skill of writing. I just delete
everything I think might feel hurtful to me. Writing should be something fun
and for hobby, not something you constantly worry about just because you're
not perfect. I wasn't corrected when I was younger, therefore I've gotten used
to how I write already. A lot of people also flame me because I do a lot of
one-shots for 'Darkshipping', which is kind of an OC ship. I do it for fun,
and to keep my mind off of other things. I'll write about what I feel like
writing about. And I'll write how I feel like writing. Flamers and anyone who
criticizes me gets on my nerves most of the time. I'm not perfect.

Flaming is Wrong. Yessir!

2008-12-26T23:34:49Z

Someone's been pissing me off. The person in question? Mightyena26. Some of you will know this person, as several of my flisters have reviewed this person, as have I.

I wrote a pretty long review for the author, trying to help her improve. Especially regarding her speech punctuation, which I even explained twice. Since then I've been blocked. Now, if the author simply didn't want criticism, then okay she's just a moron, but instead she's just been blocking 'flamers'. Meaning, whoever is blocked is being named a flamer.

She's been ranting aplenty about these so called 'flames'. Repeatedly and annoyingly so, while still ignoring the reviews and not improving at all.

An example of her complaining about flamers:

I've been getting a lot of flames lately, but I also get a lot of good, encouraging reviews. I'm not letting flames get to me, so flamers should simply back off and go find a fiction they actually like. Also, go read KengoGirl's fictions! She is so much better than I am at writing, and her grammer is better too. Now, please read and review for my FanFictions. No flaming is allowed! I block flamers! Bye!

And

New chapter. Great. More flames, if I had to guess. We need 'fireproof' fictions on this site. Anyways, please read and review. Things will probably start to get more exciting in this chapter. This could be one heck of a fiction in the end, longer than anything I've ever written. It will be good in the end. I think even Ikarishippers will love this overall. People just aren't giving me time. Everyone's acting like a freak towards me, and I've taken it to heart. I don't trust hardly anyone, aside from my BFF KengoGirl. Anyways, please read and review. No flames.

So, basically she's also full of herself.

Instead of just taking it, though, I figured I'd put my nice voice on and send her a PM. Since I've been blocked on my original account, I used another one to do so. I'm not expecting a serious reply, but one can only hope.

Hey there!

I'm just sending you a friendly email to get a question answered. ;) I hope that's okay. This is not meant to be mean whatsoever, I'm just curious about something and figured I might as well ask. You seem like an open and active person, so I figured you wouldn't mind.

I'm just wondering why you've been blocking people who gave you constructive criticism. Now, I can see why some of you may have looked slightly rude to you, but there's been a couple of reviewers who merely gave you some constructive criticism. Like how to properly punctuate speech. None of those were actually flaming you, yet they've been blocked and you've been citing that you're blocking those who flame.

I'm just curious what happened there and why it's happening. ;) After all, it's great constructive criticism like that we use to improve.

Thanks for your time!

Let's see what happens. Farla, Act, have you also been blocked? *grin*

razorleaf @ 2008-12-25T22:50:00

2008-12-25T21:55:10Z

ATTENTION, BOYS AND GERMS.

Utter spontaneity is my prerogative, so I have no other justification than that I felt like it. >:3

This is

the second part

to that weird fic

some of you may have heard of

from way back when.

Destiny Journeys: Healing of Hearts.

PLEASE EXCUSE THE ANNOYING TITLE. TIS TOO LATE TO CHANGE IT NOW. T___T

NOTHING TO IT BUT TO DO IT.

///+++DESTINY JOURNEYS: THRENODY+++\\\

Source.

...

Basically, Mix - *salutes, as she knows Mix reads this* - is thinking about starting a new fic in the Destiny Journeys series. I'm not sure why it's not something new and why the title was chosen even though it would confuse and boggle about 99% of the readers, but hey... I'm just glad I'll be able to review without getting told I can't review old stuff.

Oh, and Merry Christmas everyone. :)